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Old 04-10-2016, 06:17 AM   #13
Artifice
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Adverse

Boy you're getting merked, I set it in motion with this verse
And stay 'exposing plot' like a spoiler alert
You ain't banging shit, everybody knows that you a fake dude
The way 'Ad pop up' in your 'windows' with a 'mac' not even a firewall could save you
Swear he models his battle tactics after his girl when they're sexin'
Because she either doesn't show at all or is always asking for an extention
You Outback dweling faggot, your girlfriend's on my mattress
And I swear I had that 'Australian Open', yellin till neigbors were complainin' bout the 'racket'



Plot

You aint ever had quotes fucking liar, I'll slam this faker
Trying to spin us with imaginary lines, whats next? your the damn Equator.

Pouncin on this faggot old skool, he don't wanna see these bars
Coz I'm taking Ad outta the show like pausing the TV while recording VCRS.
You don't know me kid, fuck your research just talking rubbish
Verse verse so full of misconceptions it more resembles an abortion bucket.


Cool reads from both, but Adverse had more that I enjoyed. I dug the concept in Plot's closer, but the rhyme doesn't work great from me... do u have an accent that makes the slant rhyme work better? also, abortion bucket seems like a weird concept... maybe if you had've used talking gibberish/abortion clinics it would've landed harder, imo.


v/ Adverse
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