Woooah, best battle I've read this season.
This is aowl battle hof material.
Adonis, very good for an atheist :p
Again your word choice is excellent and very natural, I love how everything Ive read from you (going way back) just rolls off the tongue so well. As far as the story goes you actually brought me back to some past situations I've been in... intense. I will say I think the beginning started off a little stronger. Great verse
Asylum, man dog... I think this is my favorite thing I've read from you, I really enjoyed this.. sincerely. Like Adonis your piece brought back some flashbacks for me and believe it or not I almost teared up in a couple parts.. as for your piece I think your closing portion was my favorite of you verse.
Quote:
dozens of steel tags adorned with identities, engorging the enemy,
with it’s million legs forming like centipedes.
Conform for an entity, engorged but remembered,
war torn flags burn to ashes and embers.
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Fuckin excellent writing man. The dog tags line hit me hard
In the toughest vote i've made this season asylum hit a little harder for me so he gets my vote in this very close battles. In this thread we're all winners for getting to read these 2 awesome verses
Mvgt= asylum