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Old 04-05-2016, 01:36 PM   #5
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Just Write

Really enjoyed this piece. Well written from start to end. The only thing I would've liked was for a better rhyme scheme for the last quartet of the verse. Other than that I thought it was extremely well-rounded.

Mr. J

Once I found the flow, I enjoyed your piece. A fun read, mostly well executed, but the flow wasn't the easiest to find with the way you've broken it up. I thoroughly enjoy terrible puns and your closer was heavily groan-worthy. I salute you.

That being said, I think Just Write has the better of the two verses. Fun reads from both.

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