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Old 04-05-2016, 01:24 PM   #7
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A cool read, although somewhat weird, because as Just Write pointed out, the picture is a woman and child, not a man and child. That notwithstanding, your piece was a good read. You developed the story nicely and tied it into the picture well.

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it still hurts in liftoff. safety check. touchdown, and taxi.
I don't know what I wanted when we got home… but this… this was the last thing.
that there stood out as a strong couplet. i liked that whole quartet actually, though the burns your throat doesn't really make sense. did u mean the pain of a dry throat?

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I remember you too. Sometimes you drop something different but cool; most of the time you're off the wall. This is most of the time.

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