Vivid/ symetrik: This was written well to a point. There were some sketchy rhymes where the rhyme didn't end the though, which is fine, but it was done sloppily at times, disturbing the cadence. I will say though that the beginning was good, it was very climatic, but then well it just turned too weird for me. Not much to say really, I think this could have won if you continued more on the dark True detective kind of mystery. The story became more like a gag, but it still had this seriousness to it that the humor didn't really shine either.
Razah/ Justwrite: Very good collab, I can't tell who wrote what. Some of the writing turn stale because the same things were being said, but in a different way. What really brought this piece into the light was the ending. The direction this took was haunting because such decisions are so emotional. And the direction of her deciding to save herself based on her rationale of the world being a crooked devious place was well done.
Vote: Razah/ Justwrite
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