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Old 03-22-2016, 04:42 AM   #14
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Sorry for the short vote, having to do it on my phone at work.

Both were good pieces, but I felt breathless had a crisper flow and his story grabbed me more. The law's piece was nice,but there were a few word choices I felt hurt the flow,and it's hard to do multiple 'tion' rhymes anymore without them feeling derivative IMO. Cool showing from both, but...

V/ breathless
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