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Old 03-21-2016, 10:21 PM   #9
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JW - at first I saw all the pictures, visualized the reverse chronology instantly and thought, this better be epic, and, well, you didn't disappoint. You could have blocked each picture to separate scenes but you blended it perfectly to make for an easy to follow, and believe, storyline. Lyrics on point, no complaints at all

Vague - my biggest issue with this is it being told from first person of one of the kids' perspectives but having too much of a modern UK hip-hop vibe. I just couldn't help imagining the grimy little brit kids standing around the gruel pot at lunch like some English orphan 8 mile lunchtruck cypher mash up. Had you just put this into 3rd person I think it may have changed my vote
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