Mvgt Frank
Timeless, great piece, if it was a no set topic battle, you would have got the vote from me, your writing was flawless imho, but, I couldn't find the connection to the picture in the least bit, maybe I'm missing something obvious, regardless though, it was a great piece
Frank - your absurd wording and obscenely stretched lines ruined this for me, had you broken it up in 36-40, this coukdve came across so much better. The story is what won this for you. You had some good spots but it was all hit or miss with rhythm, almost like each line was long enough to be it's own separate piece
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