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Old 03-21-2016, 09:56 PM   #10
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J - this piece was pretty much perfect, even reading back I can't find anything to pick apart, the catfish story take on the picture is fucking hilarious, but you did it in a not silly way, the cadence was on point, build up and reveal of plot, I mean, it was good everywhere

Razah - also a really great piece, captured the man's struggle physically and emotionally with great imagery. My only real complaint is the lines, many times there's was an extra hard syllable between the multi-rhyme sets that through if my read rhythm
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