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He chose to taste all his failures through bourbon and whiskey
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Just because I like my whiskey.
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These were his toughest times, invisible to the youngest minds
the dirt no longer a single pixel, but a portrait filled with mud and grime
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That was dope. I would've written it a little differently, but I fucks' with it.
Cool verse over all. I enjoyed rapping it, flowed well.
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It was the last time she allowed it to happen,
kept her head above water while she drowned in the passion.
Feet finally free from the grounds that she'd stand on,
now she can breathe easy with the knowledge this man's gone.
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That was my favorite section there. Your verse drew me in 'emotionally', and I liked that about the verse. I also felt like the other segments didn't quite have that 'umph' like the segment I really liked, which to me hurt the over all piece. I seen you posted a verse to some random picture, and posted this verse after. If you wrote both of those in the same week, I think that's pretty dope in itself.
Anyways, I feel like breathless can write some shit if he manages to consistently write with that integrity. But for now, I feel like The Law had a better over all verse.
vThe Law