tough one for me
Artifice has a great flow here
I'd quote lines but it's pretty self-evident and consistent throughout
Regrettably, my "personal preference" may have hurt him here... if he was going against a "lesser" verse he'd get my vote,
But, with the verse here by Asylum, also crisp flows and rhymes
By personal preference I guess I mean I am leaning towards
mvgt Asylum because of a bit more storytelling/imagery thrown in
Artifice, this take on Death, while sound technically.. I am not sure... maybe I was just expecting a little story mixed in with the turn-of-phrases
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asylum you've got my vote here for the above reasons, but I do not like your closing line at all (content-wise)..
There isn’t a single thing in the world this woman didn’t give.
Cliche& Seems like you're just trying to wrap it up/get it over with
until one day in Vietnam the shrapnel didn’t miss.
^cool. With this kind of setup I think you could have found something better to close with
close; good job both