man, been some very tough votes this week, most of what ive read could have gone either way,
Mr. J... lol cant believe you wrote to that pic... and won, now ill tell you why you got my vote
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His plan started by setting up the usual facade.
a back-story that turned into a beautiful mirage.
a dream within a dream, consumed in the thought.
He would dance to his own beat of delusional applause
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ok so that was just exceptional, i really really liked the beautiful mirage line for some reason. also if i remember correctly hackers exposed millions of ashley madison profiles and revealed quite a few of them (in the thousands) were fake, dont know if thats where you got this idea or not but for me it made it a relevant and more believable story so bravo, the cali/jersey line was dope as well
Razah, you have become one of my favorite writers in this league even though i barely started reading your work, your small details and thought provoking lines can be credited for this, for instance this here
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Felt like I was drowning in fear but no one would lend me a hand
Had to float back to the shore & decided to blend with the sand
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that was just beautiful... no homo
the following line though made me say ugh, i hate the whole "life's a beach" cliche line, i think its played out and also stood out in this piece as whats the word? maybe tacky? idk, i still enjoyed your verse quite a lot but going against an opponent like mr J you have to be 100% on point and i feel like this piece wasnt quite there
again another great battle but in this one mvgt=Mr. J