Mr. J- Your approach here was very calculated. And the rhythm was impeccable. Then there was the humor that coated the piece throughout its entirety. Albeit, I did have some confusion that entered my mind, while I read this. Namely from this line "Jack often posed as voluptuous women in their thirties". Are you saying he dressed up as older woman? I thought he scammed them not pretend to be one. I say this because there seems to be discord between this and what follows. So, a little more clarity there would have made it more luminous. Still, I understood the essence and it was comical and satisfying.
Razah: Your simplicity never fails. Its like I said to you sometime in the Winter topical, that you are like a shadow, a topical ninja. Mostly because you don't make a lot of noise, but when it comes to it, your always at the semi's having annihilated quite a few writers along you way. And of course your simplicity and smoothness is your greatest weapon, but you do rely on them almost to a fault. And this is the case here. You tackled the topic very straightforward, and it was almost predictable. Which at times is the necessary move, but here with Netcees clown as your opponent, he will pull a wildcard of unpredictability on you. And I don't think he outwrote you, but he did outconceptualize you and repelled the very real emotion you conveyed with his humorous take.
Vote: Mr. J
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