Netcees - View Single Post - Week 3: Jesodist vs. Godcomplex (GODCOMPLEX WINS 6-1)

asylum · 03-20-2016, 05:34 AM

Unbornbuddha - OOOOOH, welcome back homie. This is the Buddha I remember bro! musta been the name change. I can already tell.. now let me finish reading! “critique” stuck out to me like a sore thumb. Idk why. Favorite bar..

Pristine and pure, that’s the Eugenic perspective.
Cleansing carnal sin off, that’s the genetic objective.

I envy your vocabulary. Seriously. Anyway, this is a piece about corporate agenda, to me. This bar sums your approach up.

Committing genocide within law. Pseudoscience applause.
Killing you all off with a smile from afar.

Definitely a great piece man. You did an excellent tongue in cheek job and examined real world issues. I truly enjoyed this piece, thank you. They really are trying to kill us off. I know. Great piece dude.

Jesodist - damn you can rhyme! Very sick. I like that second line,
His insides are Dark matter creating its Own Reality,
Pretty dope man. I think you could have cut out “and slowly started to” and just put a d on dismantle and that fifth line would’ve read much smoother. Watch your syllable count g, just say the verse out loud and count each syllable. If you start hitting 15, you might want to wrap it up. Because these long lines are really hard to get through man, no offense. I truly enjoy your style but sometimes less is more. I started figuring out which topic you were writing to here..

With Battle wounds that stretch from the Mouth to the Ear with huge Cuts Everywhere,

So I wasn’t really upset . dddaaaaammn you’re really goin in tho. Incredible find, indelible mind.. digging these rhymes tho. This was so ill too!

The one responsible for all the Crop Circles,His skin is uncrushable and Dark Purple,

Then here..

Whisper a Prayer to the Breeze before Entering the Layer of the Beast,
With Alien Feats sacrificing the pagans beneath until the spirit of Satan is Released.

So sick. So, so sick. I love this demonic rap shit its ill tho. But in all reality, near the end it needed to switch it up a little. Perhaps some character resolution, allowing him to be freed. Either way this was a dope drop and I really appreciate it bro. It obviously took a lot of work.

MVGT unbornbuddha this week because his piece was more complete as a whole. In all reality, I did enjoy a couple parts of jesodist’s drop more than buddha’s, but buddha’s piece in its entirety was a fully developed masterpiece with an excellent intro body and conclusion.

03-20-2016, 05:34 AM	#7
asylum Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2014 Posts: 999 Battle Record: 7-5 Rep Power: 8214211	Unbornbuddha - OOOOOH, welcome back homie. This is the Buddha I remember bro! musta been the name change. I can already tell.. now let me finish reading! “critique” stuck out to me like a sore thumb. Idk why. Favorite bar.. Pristine and pure, that’s the Eugenic perspective. Cleansing carnal sin off, that’s the genetic objective. I envy your vocabulary. Seriously. Anyway, this is a piece about corporate agenda, to me. This bar sums your approach up. Committing genocide within law. Pseudoscience applause. Killing you all off with a smile from afar. Definitely a great piece man. You did an excellent tongue in cheek job and examined real world issues. I truly enjoyed this piece, thank you. They really are trying to kill us off. I know. Great piece dude. Jesodist - damn you can rhyme! Very sick. I like that second line, His insides are Dark matter creating its Own Reality, Pretty dope man. I think you could have cut out “and slowly started to” and just put a d on dismantle and that fifth line would’ve read much smoother. Watch your syllable count g, just say the verse out loud and count each syllable. If you start hitting 15, you might want to wrap it up. Because these long lines are really hard to get through man, no offense. I truly enjoy your style but sometimes less is more. I started figuring out which topic you were writing to here.. With Battle wounds that stretch from the Mouth to the Ear with huge Cuts Everywhere, So I wasn’t really upset . dddaaaaammn you’re really goin in tho. Incredible find, indelible mind.. digging these rhymes tho. This was so ill too! The one responsible for all the Crop Circles,His skin is uncrushable and Dark Purple, Then here.. Whisper a Prayer to the Breeze before Entering the Layer of the Beast, With Alien Feats sacrificing the pagans beneath until the spirit of Satan is Released. So sick. So, so sick. I love this demonic rap shit its ill tho. But in all reality, near the end it needed to switch it up a little. Perhaps some character resolution, allowing him to be freed. Either way this was a dope drop and I really appreciate it bro. It obviously took a lot of work. MVGT unbornbuddha this week because his piece was more complete as a whole. In all reality, I did enjoy a couple parts of jesodist’s drop more than buddha’s, but buddha’s piece in its entirety was a fully developed masterpiece with an excellent intro body and conclusion.