Jilti - RV, Rainbow 6, and Comfort Inn Suites were all dope. That Comfort Inn Suites line was probably my favourite because it worked both ways really well. The RV line was just hilarious. Nice drop.
VV - very wordy on this attempt, bro. I know you're transitioning to the battling shit. I'd suggest trying to do some super short bars next time out. The wordiness can sometimes fuck with the effect.
Yo in that tuxedo line, leaves don't make sense. Like, is a leave a part of a tuxedo?
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I bet Jil's an anal-retentive germaphobe, OCD bout his vitamins and minerals.
So scared of dirty fighting in his battles most his bars are subpar subliminals.
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I think if you keep going with the battling, it's lines like this that you gotta cut out. The setup is kinda funny, but the punch is kinda indirect to the concept that you're setting up. And saying "subpar subliminals" isn't really harsh, like when I'm voting, I'm not gonna look at that line and be like, "Ooooooooh, got 'im!!" You know.
Vote -- jilti