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Old 03-15-2016, 03:50 AM   #14
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Godcomplex – to be simple and honest with you, I’m not really feeling your approach. I mean I guess you did the best you could with what you had but you started very strong and ended.. well, not so well. I enjoyed your first stanza much more than the first. Well you ended pretty dope actually. I do not feel you got too into it, in the end. No offense.
Razah – dude you’re a beast . I can feel the emotion in each line as I read it. Favorite lines..
I admire your presence, due to you, I desire the freshest
There isn't a day when you aren't enticing my senses
But these took a close runner up because the feels..
When my hunger is fed, it's the quickest to vanish
But every moment you're gone is like I'm instantly famished

MVGT - razah because he didn’t take a topic and work from it. He took an emotion and incorporated his topic into it. It’s not what you can do for your topic, but what your topic can do for you.. feel me GC?
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