Mmlp – well I didn’t know you were about that life, mmlp. This is some excellent content. Usually I’m not a huge fan of including yourself and the writing process inside of the verse because I’m being judgemental or a hardass, but your topic really gave you a pass this week and you took the opportunity and hit it head on. I really enjoyed it. Nice piece man. Not anything new, but definitely well executed. I know you signed out, but on your return try and get outside of yourself. The writing process becomes more when you do so. If anything else you’ll get a bonus match with lars, till next time.
Maximus – your flow and rhyme slants remind me of action Bronson. Word choices too. If you’re him you owe me a collab track. Enjoyed how your second stanza started much more than the body of your first. the flow was nice. Favorite lines..
I'm uplifted when I'm here, enraptured and blissful
Elated by the sound of drums and clashing of cymbals
Pretty sure this is the backstory of a priest. Your story was entertaining enough, but to be honest I’ve never truly been a member of a congregation and this piece didn’t speak to me very much. But I do appreciate your angle, efficient word choices, and capacity to rhyme well. Nice piece.
Mvgt – mmlp , I simply enjoyed his piece more. They’re pretty neck and neck as far as mechanics go tbh. I’m simply a heathen. I related to mmlp’s piece more. If I went to church every Sunday I’d probably vote for max tbh.
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