Sup. The positive:
I like the fact you don't obcess on using such a unreasonably wide vocabulary to where it makes me have to look up every other word. As a reader thats simply just not fun. As a writer your aim should be to capture a wide variety audience wise i believe you did. Perfect balance between complexity and simplicity imo. The topic is attention grabing imo. I can see great effort was taken too be descriptive and that lead to me playing this story out Like a movie in my head. Its difficult to do that consistently with a piece this long without getting lost along the way, or at least it would be for me. Your rhyming ability is and always has been superb but alot of your drops conceptually go over my head. This one didn't, props.
The negative: The only negative(for a lack of a better term) would be that you repeatedly used "he". He did, he said, he looked etc. I thought you could have been a tad bit more creative on that part and used better wording. However that is minor and in no way ruins the place, just my two cents no hate intended.
Overall a pretty solid piece dude. Deserves more feed tbh.
My favorite section was the opener. Dope scheming.
If you could spair the time to feed my collab with genocide and endsane itd be appreciated dude. Title is "the art of confessions".
Keep spittin.
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