GODCOMPLEX'S PIECE
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Trying to pry free from this nameless place
That took away all the basic traits of my character: face and age
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awesome multis and well worded imagery.
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These existential chains of events make it hard to remain centered and sane.
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could have flipped around a word or two and made the flow on point.
all in all, a good piece imagery wise. went a little too deep for my tastes, but nice nonetheless.
RAZAH'S PIECE
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The first thought before I wipe the crust from my eye
But I close them right up as I lust for that sight
So my heart rumbles, it'll shake the thunderous skies
The most beautiful words couldn't explain this hunger of mine
Grew up wanting a slice of the pie, just a sliver of life
'Til we finally met & I was satisfied with a nibble or bite
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flow like water. - bruce lee
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You've made me feel like a King who was lacking a throne
I could walk in, & the aroma alone would make me happy I'm home
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this piece held a pretty consistent rhythm to it that kept me involved. never strayed from topic and just drove the point home. verged a little into "maybe he's talking about a woman", but didn't go too far down that path which is nice.
MVGT @
Razah