[Alice White]

Godcomplex -

I thought this was very well written. You had some great imagery, and I was quite fond of the strikingly poetic narrative of this. I like how you, rather subtle at certain spots, incorporated the "sweet potato pie" as a reoccurring element. It would've been great to see some enhancement of the narrative or a more detailed development of the character, since I'd have liked to see a more thorough connection to the "topic" on hand. Your approach is rather original and abstract, though. This very abstractness required some rereading, though, but I thought you did quite well overall. Scheme-wise, I found your approach with a singular rhyming pattern quite interesting, and for the most part it worked nicely. A smooth read overall.


Razah -

You obviously had a more straightforward approach on this, but I thought this was quite entertaining. Although the imagery and certain lit. elements weren't the focal point of your verse, I appreciate the authenticity of it. It would've been great if you added some details to the narrative, though. This was also very well written scheme-wise. The switch ups of the rhyming patterns had a nice balance to it, which made for a smooth read.

This is a close one, but I thought that Godcomplex did more in terms of originality here.

Mvgt - Godcomplex