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Old 03-14-2016, 03:13 PM   #9
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Sym, verse flowed really well. It was very smooth & wasn't necessarily a short bar style. So, I appreciate having a natural, or not so natural, way of being able to put enough syllables in each bar & still have it come off smooth. Also, I liked how "real" the wording was. What I mean by that is, it doesn't sound like you had a thesaurus next to you, trying to sound more sophisticated than a topical should be. Some of these guys over do that for the "vocabulary" aspect and I find it annoying. PS: I don't think you went the 32 bars.

echo, that first bar was dope. The story was cool, so was the flow/rhyming. It feels very similar to sym's, just.. broken up more. Hmm. Anyways, don't really have anything bad to say about this piece.

I enjoyed both verses, and they both seem like they have very, very similar styles, but I liked Echo's story more. Both were enjoyable, I just preferred one over the other.

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