Thanks for making this a very easy vote.
Baron, the rhyming was cool, the short syllable bars made the read quick, and it was just a good piece overall.
Jesodist, I'm starting to dislike your style more & more. I'm usually not one to nitpick on someone's "style" as far as cosmetic reasons, but capitalizing your "multi's" is becoming annoying. Not for the fact that they're capitalized, but because they tend to make me over enunciate / stress the rhyming on those parts, and for the most part, the syllable count is off or the multi doesn't even correctly "fit". It made me dislike the piece. Also, your thoughts being scattered didn't help much.
Plain & simple, I was able to get through Baron's verse, and I forced myself to read Jesodist verse.
vBaronMynd
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