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Godcomplex - Solid writing here. No question. The trouble with using the same multi-chain for an entire verse, while impressive, is that the rhyming can become very mechanical sounding and robotic. It's very hard to utilise well, and keep it natural sounding, which it didn't in spots. Other times like "celestial cage" it worked extremely well and was very enjoyable for me to read. I noticed a few occasions where the rhyme was a syllable off (angelic parade/messengers defaced) and that may only be a small thing but when the rest is so on point it stands out like a sore thumb to me because I'm a perfectionist and it's such a glaring oversight that is so easily rectified! Feel me? It's mostly butter to read even though it has a more spoken word vibe to it than "rap" where some of the lines seem too many syllables long to have a natural cadence to them. I liked the re-call of the opening lines nearer the end, I too have used that to good effect previously, and you did it justice here. The storytelling was on point. Great line to finish on also, so poignant. This reminded me a lot of my verse about The Elephant Man because I use the same multi-string right the way through the verse like you have here haha!

Razah - I felt like this verse could be used in a compliments battle for long parts haha! It was obvious where you were going (to me, at least) and I wish you had developed it a little more to make it an extended metaphor. Maybe on you warming her/it up or slowly undressing her (unwrapping it) before heating up the oven or some shit, maybe that's just me? It wasn't bad just not as creative as Godcomplex here. I much prefer your shorter lined punchy style and flow, but the technical merit and skill behind GC's piece is hard to overlook when he also had the better take on the topic and flipped it like he did with him being a ghost.

This is another style clash of a battle, I can def see why some would prefer Raz over GC this week but for my money, Godcomplex takes it for being that little bit more creative with his flip on the topic and his execution.