Hmmmmmmmmm...
timeless revered me with the more engaging storyline, I liked the idea behind it and thought he executed it reasonably well even though it felt a bit short. It could have used some more character background building to make me "feel" for what was happening to the couple other than it all just being resolved and them getting high like every day could be their last etc. I liked the concept, just felt the execution didn't do it the full justice it deserved this week, for me, at least.
Asylum: I think although your take wasn't as "creative" as timeless' here, in that he almost transcended the topic (I said the same about Echo this week, go figure) and really made a whole story around it rather than let it dictate where his story should go, but you had the by far execution and wording here IMO.
Quote:
inscriptions listing lasting depictions, visions from hell.
Perhaps even one’s from which our existence was built,
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That's deep, yo. All the materials come from space stardust. I love the connection. I've wrote on it myself.
I admit, Asylum lost me at a couple of points where the end rhymes didn't rhyme. I don't like that. All in all, Asylum seemed to go for a more "topical" route up against the "storytelling" or timeless' piece. This match was a stylistic clash to me, both could probably learn from the other in what they do well and what they don't so much. timeless was the more entertaining overall, even though I think Asylum maybe is the more flare writer here. It's a weird one to vote on, in truth, but I'd give it to timeless.