it's tough
on one hand GodComplex dropped a very good verse. it was poetic in nature, at least as far as the rhyming went. a lot of slant rhymes and internals. the story and creativity were the high points of the verse, i wanted to know what would happen next. i liked the pacing of the story. i didn't like some of the awkward phrasing throughout which was jarring at times. overall it was a well written piece. your style is your own.
razah on the other hand took a more obvious take on the topic. using that spin on the topic could also be seen as an advantage though. you know already that it will pretty much resonate with everyone. nothing beats a love story. we're all soppy idiots. they rhyming was fluid and you used some really nice phrases
the difficulty is that both of your styles really clash. GC used more advanced vocab and sacrificed some rhymes for progression whereas Razah possibly sacrificed creativity to resonate with the reader. as far as writing on the topic goes, that's not a voting point for me. the topic is for you to interpret, not for others to judge you based on your perceived ability to ''stay on it''.
i could go either way but i think that i need to vote for GC. i maybe didn't enjoy his verse as much as Razah's but it is the more creative and had more advanced mechanics. i was a fan of the story he attempted to tell
vote GC
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