Lars,
Man... you have no idea, I connected with this piece like no other.
It almost felt as if you gud into he pages IN MY MIND. This was very well written, top notch work here. You have a very unique style that is just butter to read. Enjoyed this very much man. I've had a similar road (although I still smoke weed, more so for back pain ect) but yea... awesome verse. MY VOTE FOR VOTW
Jesodist, I actually enjoy your writing but I want to say the same thing as I said last week and I want you to take it into consideration, I still feel like you are writing with a dictionary open and unfortunately that's the way it reads as well (and btw I used to do the same thing so don't think I'm picking on you, I will look for some early shit I wrote to post for you) I would love for you to just clear your mind and just write like you were just talking to a friend. Don t try to overwhelm your piece with so many internals because that will all come naturally. Anyways man, don't get me wrong I think you have some really great concepts and takes on a topic it just comes off forces a bit. Take this as contractile criticism and nothing else. Cheers
Mvgt=Lars for a more enjoyable read and almost making me cry like a baby
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