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Old 03-14-2016, 07:45 AM   #5
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Time – dark, dark twist on ‘lets gets stoned’. Very good I thought, a Romeo and Juliet feel to it. Didn’t like the phrase, ‘opposite to Christian’, that’s not correct at all but besides that, this was very good, enjoyed reading!

Asy – on second read, im still lost here man. Im struggling to grasp exactly you’re talking about. I hope to be enlightened and maybe im being completely dumb. But this didn’t work for me. Rhyming was solid throughout but flow was off putting at times! With more time I might of got this but im rushing through these atm.

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