Vote - Symetrik
Symetrik - really liked this, first and last half of the line multi changes made for an easy smooth read. The cyber Bonnie and Clyde vibe was pretty cool, but you totally lost me with the last stanza, what's gone? The message, the parents, her kids (did she have kids), did she miscarry? I dunno, maybe I'm just missing something, but yea, solid piece up until the ending confusion
Echo - straight from the start I imagined a Liam Neeson playing Roland from The Gunslinger Stephen king books, but told from a grimey hood style with oddly folksy splashes of vocabulary. I think it would have came off better to me if you had stuck more with one side, I would have preferred the raw hip hop telling of this, lose the specific names and bits of fancy wording and this coulda killed.
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