MMLP, where do I start upon reading your verse...
I thought you were going in a different direction at first
as I kept reading though I was no longer concerned
I understand your frustration & I know being misunderstood hurts
when I started catching on this felt like a great spin on your topic
the love you have for what you do shines through, its honest...
its rare seeing a piece like this & after last week I feel haunted.
you are one of the most consistent & most original since you started
its great watching you flow so smooth & watching you progress
the way you wrap your rhymes into the next line left me impressed...
this was nice breh....
Maximus, your verse was one I had to read again...
though the wording felt kind of weird I liked how this begins
you find a scheme that works for you & it all makes sense
you season the verse with funny concepts & then it ends..
Im unsure if you meant to switch it up the way you did
because the second verse doesnt feel like your smoothest..
the wording felt rushed & you toy with your religious influence
which is cool...but I felt the first verse was so sick it was stupid.
not stupid in a bad sense but stupid the way you played with each line
the whole cell/well/L/Dell scheme made me want to push rewind...
aside from that though...the second section was alright...
nice work bruh..
v/MMLP, I thought his train of thought was on point throughout
he touched on some key moments that most writers seem to do now
we all have lives outside of the league & he expresses that nicely
Maximus had a smooth start but the ending hurt him with his rhyming...
his word choice felt forced & it sucks because that first verse was smooth
both had some impressive verses & I enjoy it when new writers come through
the future looks bright for both of you...
nice work....
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