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Old 03-10-2016, 03:01 PM   #3
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^^^lol


anyway this was pretty cool I thought you got off to a bumpy start though
as I put a step forward...that sounded kind of weird to me saying it...
but I did enjoy the bits of multi usage that you put into this...really made it shine
I feel after you got over that hump you really started to build a stronger presence
especially in these areas

as I'm nearing the said, the shrouding unveils an eerily madness
with piercing glances, to freeze the blood in my vein
as synthesized as every pigment on the canvas
visualized limbs on a threshold, elapsing
depicted visions of intrinsic blisses, panic

^^^
that was a nice read right there. I enjoyed this though
keep it up..
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