[Alice White]

The highlights of this verse were its smoothness and interesting narrative, I thought the overall concept was quite good. An intriguing approach you took here, and I really like the direct tone of it. Thought that the "gluten-free" line was good. The last line was expertly conveyed, imo, rather concealing the character's stand point than providing a straightforward closure. Scheme-wise, it was nice, it would've been interesting to see a thorough emphasis on internals and multis, though. But this had a very smooth flow regardless. An entertaining read overall.