Jesus, might sound like a dick but this was such an annoying read. You must have one hell of an accent to make every single one of these lines actually rhyme in your head. Slant rhyming at its lowest point and I'm not a fan. After 3 reads I still can't grasp what exactly you're context is about.
Razah, slowly becoming one of my favorite writers around here. Just seems like you write with such ease. The only thing I didn't enjoy was the ending, other than this battle was pretty lopsided IMO.
V. RaZah
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