Timeless, intriguing rhyme scheme. These 2 lines really stood out to me, I thought they were pretty slick. Really solid work, enjoyed the whole piece
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Teaching the physics of how our success is usually measured in sorrow.
King of the jungle, yet his people are trying to send that lion to his den.
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Maximus, I really liked the direction you went in. The whole "rock" couplet was kinda wack, felt like you could've done something, anything, different there, & it would've been okay. This is the first time I read something from you, and it's been enjoyable. The flow was on point for me, not as complex as timeless, if anything, very simple, but I really liked the verse anyways. If anything, I think the simplicity might have worked in your favor, because you're getting my vote based on me enjoying it more.
vMaximus