Timeless: there were glimpses here and there of a trajectory, but for the most part, there was a round about discussion of several themes, some of them dealing with the uncertainty of life's systematic processes. The writing itself was done well, its just the content itself lost itself trying to discuss the vicissitudes of life.
Maximus: This is my first encounter with your writing, quaint yet also quirky due to the manner of its presentation. I feel some form of punctuation will help set the rhythm to your piece better, even if done sporadically, so the pauses and breaks don't disrupt the natural spontaneity that I assume you are striving for by omitting the inclusion of commas and periods. More straightforward in its approach, but I enjoyed that aspect of it.
Vote: Maximus
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