[Adonis]

Just write, I never fully enjoy these types of verses because of the content. That thug angle obviously has been done before, but though this is your first verse back in years, I shall continue. You still have that natural flow, though you are clearly rusty because you have dropped consistently much better then this in the past. You had flashes though, so you're on the right path I guess. I look forward to reading that natural cadence of a flow of yours. Elevate.

Em - oh shit man, it's rare feeling I get after reading your verse, but every once in a while you miss the mark and I just don't like it. The flow was off putting because it took me a couple reads to catch, that's nothing though. The story is something I simply don't connect with in all honesty. I haven't had cable in a decade at least. I do appreciate however, the attempt at executing a difficult concept, and in a way I guess you did, because I know exactly what you were going for, unfortunately the topic was basically self explained, so your concept didn't have to much thought into it. But it was a difficult route in my eyes to centralize all your thoughts on characters you did not create.


V. / Just write.

The downsides of his verse were less glaring IMHO