Crazy battle. 2 finely crafted narratives with 2 unique writing styles behind them.
Deadman, I loved reading this, not only for its content, but for the scheme and overall flow of it as well. The word choice here was very strong, but nothing felt too overpowering.
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many quick to start their sentences non-sequiter bound
i tried to make them leave a life, objective as ground
silent solipsism. an exercise rejected aloud
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Frank, your flow here was disjointed as hell, not in a bad way at all though. The characterization was a lot stronger in this piece I think, but the story didnt really come together until the end, leaving me partially bored at first. Still a great piece
V/ deadman