This deserved a lot more feed than it has received,
a majority of the wording is set up so precise that its given me the urge to focus
As I was reading I had to stop and scroll down to mention this part...
I’m tired. Tired of even trying to find what’s real
on an uneven keel worn in my gait’s patter:
carry a penchant for the most unsafe patterns of behaviour
as if natural or favourable, in a false paradigm, what’s crazier?
Not having Time to spare but to iron my paisley shirt.
I see Evil in the world, and what hurts is I may be worse
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Seeing something like this around these parts gives me hope for the OM
its rare to see such a wide array of thoughts tossed together in such a compact piece
I dont know how I missed this but I really enjoyed how you put this out there
the ending really improves the impact of the piece & I literally lold at your following comment
that moment where I the strutting butt came into play kind of threw me off
but this whole piece was flames...heres another bump
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