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Pinot Grij · 03-01-2016, 10:05 PM

You seem cool enough, but your diction comes across as very pompous.

draw the prequel scheme , a torpid gesture, magna culpas inter leap, trunken

If you're just trying to flex your mental muscle for the crowd, that's fine - but it's in no way engaging or interesting. Give me something I can relate to, that I can cling onto and find some common ground with. It's impossible to do that with what you've presented. You seem smart enough to conjure something more palatable and of less haughty design. I look forward to reading your stuff in the AOWL because you appear to have great potential, but I hope it's not all that similar to this.

Oh, and what language is trunken a word in?

03-01-2016, 10:05 PM	#9
Pinot Grij Senior Member Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 863 Battle Record: 23-19 Accomplishments - OM HOF Champed - Fight Night 2 - Write Week V - Netcees Battle League (2x) - Winter Topical II - 1-2 Punch league Rep Power: 29195064	You seem cool enough, but your diction comes across as very pompous. draw the prequel scheme , a torpid gesture, magna culpas inter leap, trunken If you're just trying to flex your mental muscle for the crowd, that's fine - but it's in no way engaging or interesting. Give me something I can relate to, that I can cling onto and find some common ground with. It's impossible to do that with what you've presented. You seem smart enough to conjure something more palatable and of less haughty design. I look forward to reading your stuff in the AOWL because you appear to have great potential, but I hope it's not all that similar to this. Oh, and what language is trunken a word in? __________________ Topical C.R.E.A.M.