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Old 03-01-2016, 12:34 PM   #4
Mr. J
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This was pretty cool to say the least, after you got over that opening scheme I started enjoying it
that social services/nervousness line was slick as penguins feet bruh, I feel like you littered this with some humorous lines
some vivid imagery here with some great references here & there...I may come back to this...Im kind of burned out reading other peoples stuff now....
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