I thought the wins been in jest line was my favorite...as far as the rest goes some didnt seem punch worthy
I feel that a majority of this came off more braggadocio than actually effecting your opponents ego...
of course there are other ways to toy with such a persons mind that I have found hilarious..
either way I feel like the satanic message could have been worked in better
you may have focused too much on that aspect with the Hellraiser line as well
you dont want to spend too much time on the same theme in a battle I believe
the girls gawk & laugh at him line felt kind of weird to me as well but I see what you trying to do
that closer was alright too, I recommend you focus more on lines like the pinterest section
cut back on the devil references & so on, work some nameplays in there & you may have something
attack the credibility & the outbursts of rage and you may have something...
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