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Old 02-29-2016, 05:53 PM   #23
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I see you @Certain the vocab is impressive as always I really enjoyed the beginning of this
the first section after I got to (break beats) I had already thought that this had some old school Nas flow
Illmatic ish...


I've read all the text of Jesus, does God possess the thesis?
Or does one hypocritical verse mean all the rest is specious?

out of this whole verse this was my favorite segment.
something about it just speaks to me on so many levels as I looked it over
I think the most impressive part of this was how you blended your verses together
I am still unsure of where Certain ends & @Witty begins.....
after scrolling back up I see how this was done now thanks to Eng...
I feel like @Witty could have built more on that opening line & brought a strong impact
@Certain has a more calculated process when it comes to how his verse builds up..
I can see how this all played out now. Really nice work from both of yall though

but this marionette remains high-strung and tightly wound.
I'm lost. I might be found. But it won't be by a righteous crowd.
It won't be by a burning bush. First we took the light from town,
then we walked along the path, jotting every sight and sound.
^^^
that portion was pretty smooth nice work fellas
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