[Mr. J]

sending shots at you like I got the fire flower..

well...however you may have put it, it was an interesting concept but the wording is off
competin with sleep/ amount of hours seems like a weird idea to work with as well
I see how you are trying to work these ideas in here but I dont feel like this rhyme scheme works for you

back when I took this slightly more serious I always wanted my end rhyme to be different from others
take this is an example

when that gun spark I power up on some fire flower
the high stays in my mind for hours & then I bust off
toss shells & stomp the body to prove you cant fuck with ours
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Or something like that. you dont always have to end your rhyme with the same rhyme if the flow is on point
you have some decent ideas & its clear that you are recording for audio so it may not come off the same
if you work on your pacing though you can make almost anything work though.
I rarely play with audio these days though so I cant really say anything else on it.

Ill read more later...just a few thoughts to toss your way