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Old 05-09-2013, 04:51 PM   #4
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Its reopened he dropped feed on Split's piece. It wasn't good feed but it's a start and that's all I can ask at this point.
To feed this piece, there were some good lines mixed with bad lines. An example of a good line:
im fly as fuck try ya luck ill have ya bitch in my caddy
Bad line:
recline the seat my dick deep n I aint wanna meet ur daddy,

Try to sit down and think of what you're going to write before you write it. Don't just drop the same old shit you know what I mean? If this is the style that you like then try to think of a creative way to say it instead of just saying it. That's my feed man. Stay active.
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