Objective, this was a good concept for this topic with him having a multiple personality diorder cuasing him to be the monster that's seen in the picture. Yojre intro was what set I off icely and carried the rest of details to the end where he kills himself, which is the most used ending for this topic. Would of liked a different kind of ending for this sine I've seen it done like this several times already. You did have an interesting way you described your details, but the result was not as creative as I thought this story would be. Still a good story
Mike. I liked this. Flow was fire... species have a twisted alignment, mission that's timeless, victims of climate, prison confinement.. and the details of this went great with the flow and broekdown the picture with a cause and effect analysis that was developed well. A lot of good sequences of events and I realy didn't see much I didn't like in this piece. Nice job
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