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Old 05-09-2013, 11:07 AM   #2
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This was a nice piece, I'm surprised no one replied to it...
I was feeling a majority of it to be honest, you had a grasp on what you were writing
..I like that...the flow didn't let up at all, and your word choice was nice as well

my horse whined beneath as the cliff edge perilously poked..
run horse. RUN. i put my barrel to it's throat,
got Pops face in my head like im starin at a ghost but fearing that it's hope,
blackened ground turns to grass & back around, i swear i'm gettin close


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that was nicely done right there...keep it up
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