wording was excellent, remind me of some shit a dude thrice used to write & he was dope as fuck. my only gripe is alot of ya end rhymes don't match up more than a syllable or two if u switched that up & kept the inners and schemes u use u'd be even better.
you're more to me than the court dates.
that was dope & especially followed by some poignancy.
the structure was nice too. poetic & how i myself usually write open mics. i hate reading blocks of text like how most topical writers set up their verse - it makes it boring and bland & removes growth possibility imo. but yea this was nice & a refreshing read
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