[Split]

MW.

liked this verse. progression was perfectly timed, imagery was cool and relevant without being overbearably symbolic. didn't like your end too much, felt like a weak statement for the vivid image you built.

Obj.

I like your cross-sensory description. felt like your flow was alllll slack for like six lines... then u switched your scheme up. thenn flow really was off the hook, shit clicked/ snapped. the rest was cool to me, not as descriptive as the opener, not as fluid as the middle, just felt lopsided everywhere

ok. close battle. gotta go with MWrecka for more enjoyment and more resonant take on topic.