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Old 02-12-2016, 10:00 AM   #13
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Another apprentice getting testy questioning me
Ur a big easy target. This is Isis at Mardi Gras, with no interest in beads
I LIKED THIS

Allen knight? Night Allen. This faggots backwards
Ur all bark. So u know I'm making paper when I chop u up to have u manufactured
NICE CONCEPTUALLY, BUT THE EXECUTION OF THE COULDA BEEN HARSHER


Dudes shooook. Nervous. Unable to express his talent
The piru sent to kill Biggie had less blood pressure than Allen
THIS IS NICE

How can u beat me? Ur sloppy.. Concepts just falter
Even when u put a thot into a bar.. she just leaves with someone not as awkward
THIS WAS DOPE IMO

Frac is the nicest at this, ur just aiight & that's it
Plus ur a choke artist. Allen could only make a name illustrating heimlich pamphlets
IVE SEEN THIS CHOKE ANGLE DONE A BIT TOO MUCH

Im a starter, Allens a bench story that made Forrest Gump thrilling
And he knows he'll go out like a losing samurai, it's his gut feeling.
IVE SEEN THIS SAMURAI/GUT FEELING A BIT TOO MUCH ALSO. HARD TO AWARD PTS HERE

VS


he would scorch u ina battle, that plan is tired
fag u try to Marc Anthony he'd light u up & leave this 'Man on fire'
ALRIGHT

9milly aimed at ya organs pussy, shells hittin ur core now
that Canister ur insides up till everything stored in ur body pours out
OK, COULDA EXECUTED THAT CAN FLIP A LIL BETTER

ur slut fucks black guys 24/7, at random parks railin it
only reason that ass Gothic is cuz she been filled w/ dark elements
THIS WAS LOLS

im boding u into retirement, u'll get wrecked w/ ratchets
Yule Log off forever cuz i burnt u alive till ya fuckin careers left in ashes
THIS WAS GOOD

ur moms sucks me off before i smash, im violent diggin her
that slut kisses the head before i slam it like Bray Wyatt's finisher
YIKES..

rob ur crib w/ a uzi, take the safe off ya table quick
snatch all the Lieutenant & leave a hole in u the size of a Naval Ship
NAH. I DIDN'T LIKE HOW U DID THIS. BOTCHED CONCEPT IMO


verdict-
Good battle.
Frac, I liked ur creativity for the most part. But ur last two concepts, I've seen done a few times. But your wording and execution was much better.
AK, you was consistent. Only bar I didn't like was your closer.


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