[Mr. J]

Pinot from the beginning of your verse Im already impressed by the use of the word fringe
rarely an opportunity arises when someone takes an uncommonly used word & adds it to their writtens
as we continue on I enjoy the flow of the piece it stays consistent with each line building to its boiling point
but then I get to....bubbly wife...I cringed but the rhyme that followed was worth the slip up
I really cant enjoy it fully though because it feels odd to me...perhaps if you said voluptuous?
perhaps you were talking about her personality? either way I feel like you kept me long enough to finish....
thats what she said.....either way I thought your verse showcased your ability to control your technique
you played with some nice concepts & made the plot work itself out, the ending wraps it up nicely as well
nice work here.

Pie, perhaps you should calm yourself with the ingredients due to your nose being scared.
I really like the flow of your piece as well you keep the rhymes stacking on top of each other
allowing your characters to become part of the fun in the picture you painted in your nostrils fear sweat
I fear I didnt enjoy the SARS mark up but once I see how you were playing with each concept I was like ohhhh
regardless I feel like some lines worked and some lines felt kind of stretched with the route you were taking
for instance this eddie & carl winslow line I thought that could be omitted from what you had going for you.
you had a few redeeming lines that push stuff like that to the back of the mind, the zombie on acid was cool.
nice work here..


v/First I would like to congratulate both writers for making it this far it has been a interesting couple of weeks
I enjoyed the performances that the both of you brought to the table upon reaching this level
I bow my head in respect.......with that being said I am leaning for Pinot on this match
Pie came with a slick verse but I feel he had more slip ups compared to Pinots verse
it also seemed like a safer route compared to what could have been brought to the table in his previous weeks
Pinot had a crisp verse with a larger amount of multis & the plot of his story left me wanting a longer verse
Pie did work though, I feel if he took the opportunity to write a stronger array of rhymes he may have evened this battle out.



v/Pinot