Quick thoughts:
Razah:
You wrote a verse about a parent's love for their child. It was simple in a good way and perhaps evoked even a little more emotion than Diode's verse. It was a good verse.
Diode:
You wrote a verse about a lost love. It was a little flowery. Maybe a little reminiscent of Gustavo Adolfo Bécquer. You had some nice imagery. It was a good verse.
Overall: Razah's verse had more emotional impact. Diode's verse had better imagery. Different styles, but pretty even. Overall, I thought Diode's verse struck the topic better where I felt he was heading in the direction that although the relationship ended, he was happy he took that blind step in---better to have loved and lost than never have loved at all. I was not sure where faith fit into Razah's verse. Perhaps faith in humanity? My vote goes to Diode. Nice battle, both of you.
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